freakish dream i had

[michaelvorhees666]

i had a very weird dream that i thought i could somehow re-work into a story.

my dream - i was being chased by assassins from the government because of something my dad found out and told me.

my idea - a girl's father disappeared, leaving her a computer chip. she now wears the chip around her neck to remember her father, not knowing what's on it. Then assassins track her down and try to kill her.

It is a basic idea - i still haven't figured out an ending. i'm not even sure if it would work.

be honest, i'm not sensitive about bad comments - tell me what you think and give any suggestions you might have.

Thanks,

Sam

[mandor700]

Its a good concept but some of it seems like its been done before. Like the girl wearing a chip around her neck; this has been done in countless movies before (with some variations of cause). Try and change it a bit so she like keeps it in a box and the only reason that they havent found it yet is because she seldom takes it out and hasent told anyone about it. etc, doing things like this could turn it into a good script, especially, as posting it in ths forum would suggest if you make it into a horror.