NAZI DEATH CAMP

[Mass]

Hey everybody, my name is Michael Magdaleno. I am a writer and amature film maker near Dallas, TX. I have posted a rough draft of my first Zombie script online. It is called "NAZI DEATH CAMP" about prisoners at a Nazi Concentration Camp being killed during horrendous medical experiments only to return from the dead to reek havoc and kill all the Nazis. Please let me know what you think. [e-mail]

Here's the link
NAZI DEATH CAMP [Rough Draft]

[unspeakablemag]

first of all...welcome to the forums...secondly...ya know what i think about it..lol....
Tracy

[AJ]

It's an interesting script. I kind of like the John Waters feel you have going there, it's pretty cool the way you have used the title 'Nazi Death CAMP' to telegraph the campness of the action.

I also like the tounge-in-cheek modern dialogue, especially the hilariously over-the-top swearing, I can imagine it being a very funny film. Perhaps you should expand on this area in the next draft?

Only thing i'm not sure about, is having it actually set in Auschwitz. It seems strange to have a comedy script be set at the site of such awful real-life atrocities.

Perhaps you would be better to create a fictional setting for the story?

Or you could set it after the war, with the German doctors working for the Allies (similar to Von Braun et-all) or even update it completely and set it at Camp X-Ray?

[Lancer009]

I took a quick look at it and came up with a few good suggestions...

Way too much black!

This is a lession that I myself had to learn. (ive cut a 200+ page script to 120 pages for people to look at it and they still say it has too much black)

I know you called this your draft... do you have any characters that we should like? Names of people or is this just something in the works?

good luck

[Randy Robinson]

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